給今天起一個(gè)好名字優(yōu)秀作文

　　第一篇：習(xí)作者（fujisiusuke）

　　we can find three points from the picture:

　　the （The first）one is that（there are） 1.1billion people smoke all over the world, which accounts for 20% of the total population (the whole number of our world is 5.8 billion). and the(The) second (point) is about the aftermath led by smoking: （there are）200 billion -dollars economic expense and 3 million lives losing per year. then(Thirdly), the last point,( is that ) (去掉)the output of tobaco（tobacco） around the word decreased from 14.364 billion pounds in 1994 to 14.2 billion pounds in 1995.

　　in(In) my opinion, the decreasing trend in tobaco's(tobacco) production will be lasting in future(will last for long此處用將來正在進(jìn)行時(shí)不合適，將來進(jìn)行時(shí)的特點(diǎn)：表示在將來某一時(shí)間正在進(jìn)行的動(dòng)作。).and (The) reasons are listed as following(as follows):

　　firstly(Firstly), as the development of medicine and other sciences related, the study on relationship between tobacco(tobacco) and many serious diseases has become deeper and deeper, which showed (show前后時(shí)態(tài)要一致)to (去to /pic/p>

　　then (then 去掉) Last but not the least, the improvement of level of material life (life quality) supplies(enables) us with various way(access) to have fun or (as well as) reduce(reduces) the sress （stress）caused by work, life and study. smoking has not been the only choice. (Smoking is far from the only choice)

　　in （In）a word, what we pursue is (a) better life, so let us do our best to reduce the harmful behavior.

　　Sara點(diǎn)評：注意英語單詞用法和選擇，避免中式英語，使句子更地道。注意標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)的運(yùn)用。

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